Joe, thanks. I'll make further tweaks to the text.
There's one thing I'd like to cross check to see if others agree, and be sure the intent is clear in the tour. I envisioned the tour serving people going through what I've been dealing with, namely a car that runs (maybe just basely), but where you otherwise have no clue what's working and what's not. In fact you expect plenty is not working and need to get it all sorted out. It could be a barn find that you just got started, or a car coming out of a long hibernation. Or even a car you just bought and need to figure out where it stands.
I do not envision it as a general tune up guide for dialing in a car that's been running fine. Nor do I see it as a periodic maintenance and tune up guide. There are other sections that address some or all of those topics.
It also is not intended to be a guide for raising a car from the dead. In not sure if there is a tour for that, but there is plenty of discussion material in the forums. Maybe a tour would be good to write at some point, but it's not what I had in mind for this one.
The other thought was to reference existing material as much as possible rather than repeat it. So for example it references the linkage tour and FIP sections and simply says to make sure the linkages are correct and that the mixture is correct. That's a big hand-wave, but I think works given the content of the other tours. In many ways it makes this a tour of tours, and just guides the reader through the other sections in a logical order given where I think they are starting from.
So the questions are:
1) is this the right approach
2) is it clear from the tour who it's intended for, that you need to spend time in the referenced sections, and is it clear what the tour is not intended to be. Personally I'm thinking I could beef it up in this respect.